Maja Informal Email FCE writing challenge June 2015

Informal email – composition no.4     11/6/2015

You have received an email from your pen friend inviting you for a visit in July. Write a letter to your friend, accepting the invitation, suggesting something you would like to do and asking what you should bring with you. 

You must answer this question. Write your answer in 140- 190 words in an appropriate style on the separate answer sheet.

Dear Fernando

It was really nice to hear from you again. Many thanks for your invitation. It’s going to be pleasure to visit you in July, in fact I’ve got a few questions before I go.

It’s a great introduction.

Don’t forget about comma-  Dear Fernando, 

   You remember I told you in my last letter I would love to see few places in your town. I hope you will find time to show me around. You know I’m a big fan of art, so I hope we can go to that famous gallery you mentioned. Guess what ? I know it sounds crazy but I’ve decided to jump on bungee. When I received your last letter with the invitation I remembered about bungee jumping organize in your city. I want to take this opportunity and I count on your support. Maybe we can do it together? By the way, could you tell me what I should bring with me? Let me know which one necessary things I’ve got to take with me.

It seems your 2nd paragraph is  a bit long, don’t you think?  You could divide the paragraph into: things you’ve mentioned about art and bungee jumping.

I would love to / I would be – use contractions e.g. I’d 

jump on bungee- we normally say bungee jump

When I received your last letter with the invitation I remembered about bungee jumping organize in your city – When I received your last letter with the invitation it instantly reminded me of the bungee jumping events organized in your city. 

tell me whatI should bring with me? Let me know which one necessary things I’ve got to take with me. – these two sentences convey the same info/ you repeat the ideas

 

I need to go now. I look forward to see you.
Wish you all the best
Maja

 

I look forward to see you – I look forward to seeing you ( After look forward to- we always use verb+ing)

I’d also add : Love, Maja and maybe a sentence such as: Please write/ drop me a line soon.

Informal email – composition no.3     10/6/2015

You have decided to go on holiday in the country where your English friend lives. Write a letter to your friend, explaining why you have not written for a while, and asking for advice on where to visit, what to see and the best way of travelling round the country.

You must answer this question. Write your answer in 140- 190 words in an appropriate style on the separate answer sheet.

       Hi Jessica
Great to hear from you again. At the beginning I would like to say that I’m really sorry I haven’t written for such a long time. I’ve been extremely busy because they gave me hard time at work so I hope you understand it. Anyway, how are you and your family?

It’s a good introduction. Well done!! I’d use a contraction here: I would like to say, and give the name or position of the person, instead of they you can use my boss/manager.

   Do you remember in your last email you asked about my plans for holiday? Well, it might be a surprise for you, but I’m going to visit your lovely country. Naturally, I would love to see you there, in fact I have some questions before I start my journey. Will you able to tell me which places I should visit? I would be grateful if you say something about regions you truly recommended. I’ve heard many positive comments about England but I’m really keen on seeing areas which are not very popular. I know you live there ever since you were born so I’m sure you can help me with that . One more thing i want to ask you about is the best way of travelling. When I say ‘the best way” I mean “the cheapest way”. I was looking for some information about traveling by Internet, but there are too many websites and I fed up so I’m counting on you.

It seems your 2nd paragraph is  a bit long, don’t you think? Maybe it would be wiser to divide it into two separate paragraphs, one about England and the other paragraph about best way to travel.

I would love to / I would be – use contractions e.g. I’d 

Will you able to – will you be able to..

if you say – if you write 

I know you live there ever since- I know you’ve lived there/been living there

the best way of travelling – the best way to travel

traveling by Internet – travelling on the Internet

and I fed up so I’m counting on you. – and I’m fed up so I’m counting on you

I’ve got to go back to work now. I look forward to meet you. Give my love to your family.

I wish you all the best.
Maja

 

I look forward to meet you – I look forward to meeting you ( After look forward to- we always use verb+ing)

I’d also add : Love, Maja

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