Maja FCE writing challenge ARTICLE

Informal email – composition no.7 ( an article)    17/6/2015

You have seen this advertisement on an international travel website.

CITY BREAKS

What’s your favourite city, and why? Write us an article:

• describing the city.

• saying why it is special for you.

We’ll publish the most interesting articles online next month

Write your answer in 140- 190 words in an appropriate style on the separate answer sheet.

Wish I was here

Have you ever thought, there’s one special place on earth that you will always be happy to visit? If you live far from area where you grew up, you absolutely must know what place I’m writing about. I’m sure you’d agree, it’s always pleasure to see region when you was born. 

It’s a good introduction. Well done! You grabbed my attention

will always be happy to visit – I think you should use present simple here, not ‘will’

you was born- really?! 

You forgot about articles such as ‘a’, ‘an’ or ‘the’!

My family home is an apartment in a small blocks of flats on the outskirts of a city called Ketrzyn. The town is located in north west part of Poland, not far from border with Russia. This is small city with about 40 thousands residents, and at the first glance there’s nothing special about it. But for me it will always be something fascinating in this city. I will never forget that terrible high school I used to learn in. I still have goosebumps when I think about some of teachers from there. From the other hand, I’ve got lots of positive memories and favourite restaurants which I always visit when I go to Ketrzyn. There’s nothing better in the world than cheeseburger with fires from Magnolia Cafe.

Well done! It’s great in terms of the content and context, however the 1st sentence refers more to the building rather than the city, doesn’t it?  It seems you only have one main paragraph- I’d suggest splitting it and include the description in the 2nd paragraph and write the rest in the 3rd paragraph.

a small blocks of flats – a small block of flats

it will always be something fascinating in this city – there will always be something fascinating in this city

From the other hand – on the other hand

You forgot about articles such as ‘a’, ‘an’ or ‘the’!

 

  I’ve been traveling to many places in my life but Ketrzyn is the one that I will always love to go back. 

 

Great!

traveling – is AmEng, whereas travelling is BritEng

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