IELTS Writing Task 2/ IELTS Essay sample band 5

IELTS Writing Task 2/ IELTS Essay:

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Today’s society provides people with various ways to lose weight, such as special diets or exercise regimes. Many people believe though that poor food and today’s lifestyle should be addressed first. What is your opinion?

Write an essay either for or against this position.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Sample answer:

In contemporary society, a growing number of people aim to keep fit by doing a strenuous exercise routine, following strict diet or preventative medicine. Whereas, others hold an opposite view. From my point of view, I agree with the latter that it is more beneficial for people to attain fitness through normal life. 

To begin with, special diets often lead to malnutrition. The nutrients from certain foods might be non absorbable by our bodies. Since, there are a lot of other foods which are not in the ‘special food list’ may help stimulate and absorb the nutrients we acquire. That is to say, sometimes, little nutrition did us get, even if we had the food in our diet list, would finally damage our health. To make matters worse, people can hardly sate their appetite while being on a strict diet. Especially for high-intensity mental workers, they can barely focus on their work results from being starved, not to mention practising intense sports to achieve good health. 

Moreover, not only will demanding sports not strengthen people’s health, they can get seriously injured from doing it, sometimes even result in permanent damage. For example, pushing limits on weightlifting without the help of a professional coach might severely damage people’s joints. It is said, that there are hundreds of amateurs who are homebound just because they failed to understand how damaging their actions had been.

Admittedly, some preventative medicine may help people get rid of certain common illnesses, like obesity, posture problems, but if we get the nutrients we need from various food, strengthen our bodies through diverse physical activities, such as running or playing basketball, we wouldn’t have to worry about our health.

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