IELTS Writing Task 1 Band 4.5

IELTS Academic Writing Task 1/ Graph Writing – Line Graph:

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Sample answer:

The diagram indicates how many millions of tones of goods were transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002. Modes of transport considered are four: roads, water, rails and pipelines. 

In 1974 the best way to carry products was by roads, while the lowest transports used were the ones by pipelines. Water and railways were quite stable to the same quantities, however throughout the years to 2002 water transports grew of more than twenty millions tones, whereas rails carrying decresed.In 2002 they came back to the same quantities of the same year. 

Except for rails, every modes of transport examined easily rise of almost twenty millions tones.

To sum up, during the twenty-eight years shown in the graph, by far the best transport method remain the one by roads, following by the one by water and after that rail carrying and pipeline, The only mode that didn’t grow was by rail.

 

Examiner comment:

Band 4.5 

The length of the answer is acceptable. There is a good attempt to describe the overall trends but the content would have been greatly improved if the candidate had included some reference to the figures given on the diagram. Without these, the reader is lacking  some important information. The answer is quite difficult to follow and there are some punctuation errors that cause confusion. The  structures are fairly simple and efforts to produce more complex or more elaborate vocabulary sentences are not successful.